I asked already but im not sure? wrote a poem for Language Arts cl.?

Its really descriptive and I like that, but your line breaks are really awkward. Line breaks are supposed to be where you pause quickly in reading to let your brain realize the meaning of the line, but yours just kind of... stop. At really strange places, like after "my", "old", etc. But other than that, I like it a lot. I'm a huge fan of really descriptive writing.